Teh Wozzinator

I'm not sure if the others have picked up on these but i'll stop by and add a few points. :arrow: You introduce a character and describe every part of ...

haha, you'd know wouldn't you Aet lololol Er. (shhhhhh!) :lol: Though actually, I started when I was twelve, but still, I know there are 11-year-old peoples who are "good with ...

I think it's an interesting concept. Computer hacking wizards? Beautiful. That being said, I think there's a lot of things that could be improved. The dialogue seems stiff and unnatural, ...

haha, you'd know wouldn't you Aet lololol

sorry if it bothers you, but capitalizing things is what i do...it's how i write

btw, the robbers are on horse, but you don't figure that out till the next chapter as for the others: thanks for the edits, very helpful

thanks.

thanks i realize how it relates back to the Harry Potter thing the thing is, is a LOT of stories are about teens now, and i liked the eleven year-old ...

i'm liking it lol

i've got about fifteen 8 1/2 by 11 pages of this story on Microsoft word i think that thoughts were in italics

haha...that's pretty funny, actually...

personally, element powers are my favorite...

hey Aet... I agree with the first post, you need to have a better meaning cuz people have done that to me on chat room.

oops, sorry about that...the last sentence is like that cuz there's apparently a character limit. sorry!